Writing Task #12: A Fun Moment

Look This Picture, at speaking Prompt 12.

Gambar Day 12:

> Remaja tertawa setelah basah kuyup di water ride.

Rambut berantakan.

Ekspresi terkejut & spontan.

Siang hari cerah.

Momen candid.

Ini kuat karena:

Ada kejadian (getting wet).

Ada reaksi spontan.

Ada before (kenapa naik wahana?).

Ada after (jadi kenangan? pelajaran?).

Kita pakai format lengkap Teaching Model.

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🗓 DAY 12 — A Fun Experience

✏ Teaching Model

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❌ Version 1 — Weak Student Writing

They went to a water park. They played on a ride. They got wet. They laughed. It was very fun. They were happy.

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🔎 Why Is This Weak?

Terlalu umum.

Tidak ada detail kejadian.

Tidak ada emosi berubah.

Tidak ada tension kecil.

Tidak ada before–after.

Ini hanya laporan aktivitas.

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🔁 STEP 1 — Add BEFORE (Model 1)

They went to a water park last weekend. At first, one of them was afraid to try the biggest water ride. His friends told him it was safe. He was nervous but decided to try.

✔ Ada keraguan. ✔ Ada keputusan.

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🔁 STEP 2 — Add Emotional Turning Point (Model 3)

They went to a water park last weekend. At first, one of them was afraid to try the biggest water ride. He felt nervous while waiting in line.

When the ride started, they screamed loudly. Suddenly, a big splash of water hit them. They were completely wet. For a second, he was shocked. Then he started laughing.

✔ Ada perubahan emosi: afraid → shocked → laughing

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🔁 STEP 3 — Add AFTER (Model 2)

They went to a water park last weekend. At first, one of them was afraid to try the biggest water ride. He felt nervous while waiting in line.

When the ride started, they screamed loudly. Suddenly, a big splash of water hit them, and they were completely wet. He was shocked at first, but then he laughed with his friends.

After the ride, they talked about how scary and exciting it was. He felt proud because he faced his fear. It became one of their best memories together.

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✅ FINAL STRONG VERSION (8–12 Sentences)

Last weekend, they went to a water park together. At first, one of them was afraid to try the biggest water ride. He felt nervous while waiting in line.

When the ride started moving, they screamed loudly. Suddenly, a huge splash of water hit them, and they were completely wet. For a moment, he was shocked and speechless. Then he started laughing with his friends.

After the ride, they kept talking about how exciting it was. He felt proud because he faced his fear. That day became a fun and unforgettable experience for all of them.

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🎯 Teaching Point for Blog

Fun story ≠ “They were happy.”

Fun story =

Before → Fear

Moment → Surprise

After → Pride + Memory

Even “fun” stories need tension.

Speaking Prompt #12: A Fun Experience

You are a chill and friendly English chat partner.

Students are beginners and usually speak in very short sentences.

Your job is to help them tell a real story in a relaxed and natural way.

Rules:

- Do NOT mention grammar

- Do NOT correct while the student is speaking

- Ask ONLY one simple question at a time

- Always react first: “oh”, “okay”, “I see”, “nice”

- Speak slowly and friendly

- Help the student tell the story step by step

Topic: A Fun Experience

Start:

“Oh, okay.”

“Tell me about a fun experience.”

Build story:

“Where did it happen?”

“Who was there?”

“What happened first?”

“Did something funny happen?”

“Why was it fun?”

“What happened after that?”

“How did you feel at the end?”

Do NOT explain rules.

Do NOT interrupt the student.

AFTER the conversation:

1. Create a short story (6–10 sentences) based ONLY on the student’s answers.

2. Use simple, natural English.

3. Make all connecting words BOLD (and, then, after that, because, so, finally, etc.).

4. Read the story slowly and clearly.

THEN say:

“Now please repeat the story exactly as I say, sentence by sentence.”

Writing Task #11: A Busy Day

Look This Picture and Write your description. Here are three models of good writing as your references.

🔁 STEP 1 — Add BEFORE (Model 1)

He was running in the rain. That morning, he woke up late because his alarm did not ring. He had an important presentation at school. He was worried because he did not want to be late. The weather was bad, but he had to hurry.

✔ Sekarang ada alasan. ✔ Ada tekanan waktu.

🔁 STEP 2 — Add Emotional Turning Point (Model 3)

That morning, he woke up late because his alarm did not ring. He had an important presentation at school. He felt stressed and nervous.

While he was running in the rain, some of his papers almost fell. His heart was beating fast. He thought he would be late. Suddenly, his teacher called him and said the presentation was delayed. He felt a little relieved.

✔ Ada perubahan emosi: stressed → panicked → relieved

🔁 STEP 3 — Add AFTER (Model 2)

That morning, he woke up late because his alarm did not ring. He had an important presentation at school. He felt stressed and nervous.

While he was running in the rain, some of his papers almost fell. His heart was beating fast. He thought he would be late. Suddenly, his teacher called and said the presentation was delayed. He felt relieved.

When he finally arrived at school, he was wet but ready. In the end, his presentation went well. That busy morning taught him to prepare better next time.

✅ FINAL STRONG VERSION (8–12 Sentences | Complete)

That morning, he woke up late because his alarm did not ring. He had an important presentation at school, and he felt very nervous. The sky was cloudy, and it started to rain.

He was running fast while holding his bag and some papers. Some papers almost fell, and his heart was beating quickly. He was afraid he would arrive too late.

Suddenly, his teacher called and said the presentation would start later than planned. He felt relieved but still hurried to school. When he finally arrived, he was wet but ready. In the end, his presentation went well, and he learned to manage his time better.

🎯 Teaching Point for Blog

Bad writing: Only describe what you see.

Better writing: Explain why → show feeling change → show result.

Structure always wins: Before → Pressure → Turning Point → After → Lesson