🗓 DAY 13 — A Small Problem
✏ Teaching Model
❌ Version 1 — Weak Student Writing
His bicycle was broken. The chain was off. He looked sad. He did not know what to do. It was a small problem.
🔎 Why Is This Weak?
Tidak ada alasan kenapa dia di sana.
Tidak ada tekanan (apakah dia terlambat?).
Tidak ada usaha menyelesaikan masalah.
Tidak ada perubahan perasaan.
Tidak ada ending.
Ini hanya menyebutkan masalah.
🔁 STEP 1 — Add BEFORE (Model 1)
He was riding his bicycle to his friend’s house in the afternoon. He wanted to return a book before evening. The road was quiet and sunny. Suddenly, he heard a strange sound from his bike.
✔ Ada tujuan. ✔ Ada momen sebelum masalah.
🔁 STEP 2 — Add Emotional Turning Point (Model 3)
He was riding his bicycle to his friend’s house in the afternoon. Suddenly, he heard a strange sound, and the chain came off. He stopped and looked at his bike. He felt frustrated because he did not know how to fix it.
At first, he wanted to call his parents. However, he decided to try fixing it himself. His hands became dirty, and he felt nervous. After a few minutes, he finally put the chain back in place. He felt relieved.
✔ Perubahan emosi: frustrated → unsure → determined → relieved
🔁 STEP 3 — Add AFTER (Model 2)
He was riding his bicycle to his friend’s house in the afternoon to return a book. Suddenly, the chain came off. He felt frustrated and worried because the street was quiet.
At first, he thought about calling for help. However, he decided to fix it himself. After trying for several minutes, he finally succeeded. He felt proud of himself.
Then he continued his ride and arrived a little late. That small problem taught him to stay calm and try before giving up.
✅ FINAL STRONG VERSION (8–12 Sentences)
He was riding his bicycle to his friend’s house in the afternoon to return a book. The weather was sunny, and the street was quiet. Suddenly, he heard a strange noise, and the bicycle chain came off.
He stopped and felt frustrated because he did not know how to fix it. For a moment, he thought about calling his parents. However, he decided to try repairing it by himself. His hands became dirty, and he felt nervous.
After a few minutes, he finally fixed the chain. He felt relieved and proud. Then he continued his ride and arrived a little late. That small problem taught him to stay calm and not give up easily.
🎯 Teaching Point for
Small problem ≠ small story.
Good structure:
Before → Problem → Struggle → Solution → Lesson
Now Give it try. This is good to help you describe your problem if you have it in the future.
